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2006-04-15 14:04:00
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[Ficlet] Supernatural: Wreckage

The ficlet severely lacks a title ATM.

And is confusing.

You may need to read this two or three times to get it.

First real anything into this fandom beyond that Faulty Wiring thing, give me time. I'll get better.

Title: Wreckage
Status: Finished
Rating: PG
Fandom(s): Supernatural
Characters: Sammy, Dean, John
Disclaimer: So very not mine, Kripke is love.
Words: 462
Summary: When Sammy was eight he was in a car accident.



When Sammy was eight he was in a car accident.

**

Mesa, Arizona.

The intersection of Baseline and Extension.

Sammy and Dad and Dean, t-boned by a driver who fell asleep at the wheel.

Sammy sitting in the backseat with a flashlight and highlighter and The Werewolf Encyclopedia, going through the book and making his own corrections.

Dean sleeping in the front seat with his legs up and against the window, his head pillowed on his jacket on his backpack stuffed in the leg space.

Sammy sees the crash like snapshots through a camera.

The ending of Dean's new Metallica tape on the radio.

Click, flash.

Watching his marker drag jaggedly cross the page.

Click, flash.

A bright light and a hard jolt.

Click, flash.

Sitting outside of the wrecked car with a paramedic and a scratchy blanket.

Click, flash.

The huge metal machine they had to use to pry Dean out of the car.

Click, flash.

Blood.

Click, flash.

Dad crying.

Click, flash.

Sitting in the ambulance, staring at his big brother's broken body.

Click, flash.

The tube down Dean's throat and the feel of the doctor's voice.

Click, flash.

**

Sammy wets the bed and wakes up crying for a solid week and doesn't know why.

Dean makes fun of him and starts the shower and Dad yells at Dean and strips the sheets and flips the mattress.

They spend another two weeks at Kyrene De Los Ninos before they find the Chupacabra that's been eating the sheep around town.

Dean twists his ankle running from the police and narrowly misses falling face-first into a cactus after hopping a fence.

They leave in the middle of the night and make it to Baseline and McClintock before Sammy starts screaming.

Dean is leaning against the dashboard with his hurt leg on the headrest singing along to "Wherever I May Roam."

Sammy screams and yells and kicks and throws a temper tantrum until Dad pulls the car over in a Circle K.

Sammy climbs out of the car and screams and yells more and the clerk comes out and asks if everything is okay and Dad says yes and Sammy doesn't get back in the car until Dean drags him in and shoves him against and the window and complains about having to give up "shotgun" just because Sammy's going to wet himself again.

Dean's still pouting and Dad's still angry when they get going once more. Sammy crawls almost completely into Dean's lap behind Dad's seat and Dean grumbles and tells him to watch out for the leg.

Dad turns the tape back on and this time it's only Sammy's books that get crushed and ruined.

**

When Sammy was eight he was in a car accident.

This time Dean survived.
Tags: fic, fic genre: gen, fic pairing: none, fic rating: pg, fic: supernatural

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[info]sacrilicious

April 15 2006, 21:24:38 UTC 6 years ago

Dude. LOVE THIS. I love fics that show Sam's powers when he was younger because they just HAD to manifest in some way. I'm also a big fan of Sam protecting Dean for once. My favorite part of it was probably the repeatition of the first and last line. I love it when stories have a strong line/image that repeats throughout. I think it's the poetry geek in me showing.

I didn't find it overly confusing either. I got in on the first try, but I got The Machinist on the first viewing. (Still need to see Momento though)

[info]clex_monkie89

April 15 2006, 22:44:51 UTC 6 years ago

Dude. LOVE THIS.

*Blushes* Thank you! I was really afraid I'd mess this up.

I love fics that show Sam's powers when he was younger because they just HAD to manifest in some way. I'm also a big fan of Sam protecting Dean for once.

I totally think Sam's powers have been there forever too; I just think that until Jessica he kinda... not so much "ignored" them but I think he repressed them. Made himself forget them before he woke up.

And? I can't help but love the idea of the little brother saving the big brother.

My favorite part of it was probably the repeatition of the first and last line. I love it when stories have a strong line/image that repeats throughout.

Thank you again! I love a nice repetitive image myself and I'm glad I got to use one here.

I didn't find it overly confusing either. I got in on the first try, but I got The Machinist on the first viewing.

I'm glad it wasn't too confusing; I was afraid of making a fool of myself with this. And I got The Machinist on the first try too. But then I spent a half an hour explaining it to another chick I watched it with. Ugh.

(Still need to see Momento though)

Dude you totally do. It is such a good movie!

[info]sacrilicious

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[info]gwyntastic

April 15 2006, 22:11:52 UTC 6 years ago

I have so much love for this fic. It was easy to follow and it had a voice of its own. What a great idea. I loved it so much.

[info]clex_monkie89

April 15 2006, 22:47:51 UTC 6 years ago

I am so happy you liked this! I was afraid of completely tanking with this. I'm glad you liked it!

[info]mooyoo

April 15 2006, 23:17:14 UTC 6 years ago

Great, I think it works perfectly like this. I'm really glad you posted it. I still love the beginning, love the brief pictures first of everything normal and then of the crash, and I think it works just fine the way you've done it. And the last line is excellent.

[info]clex_monkie89

April 15 2006, 23:44:01 UTC 6 years ago

Thank you so much babe. I can honestly say that if it weren't for you I probably never would've posted this.

And now? I'm being attacked by bunnies. I have three pages of another SPN fic going and more bunnies lines up around the corner including the Linc/Michael one and a Dean/Michael one.

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[info]fiddleyoumust

April 16 2006, 05:54:42 UTC 6 years ago

Oh Clex! You made me read Supernatural fic... and I loved it. This whole piece pops off the page. I really love the part about Sammy throwing the temper tantrum in the parking lot. I can see it so vividly... and Dean being annoyed. They love each other so much!

[info]clex_monkie89

April 16 2006, 06:15:02 UTC 6 years ago

Yay! I made you read it! Does that mean you'll read the one I'm gonna finish within the next day or two?

I'm very glad you enjoyed this and I'm glad that it came across right. I was seriously afraid that this was gonna me all... crappy.

[info]fiddleyoumust

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[info]veradeath

April 16 2006, 17:06:27 UTC 6 years ago

Dude.

This was utterly fantastic!!!!!!!!

Loved the idea of Sam's powers manifesting like that. Everything was perfect.

[info]clex_monkie89

April 16 2006, 21:48:55 UTC 6 years ago

Thank you sweetie! I'm glad you liked it!

[info]veradeath

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[info]halfshellvenus

April 18 2006, 18:31:55 UTC 6 years ago

I love the twist, that it didn't happen yet, and that Sam's freaking out about nightmares of what might happen-- and then the realization that it will, once he recognizes the road they're on.

The last line is chilling.

Titles (were you just waiting? I was on vacation): "Once, Almost" (too spoilery?), "Wreckage", "The Toll of the Highway" (!), "Bad Road", "Cost of Mileage", "Force of Impact", Collision Damage", "Hard Mileage".

Enough?

[info]clex_monkie89

April 18 2006, 21:39:10 UTC 6 years ago

and then the realization that it will, once he recognizes the road they're on.

I really wanted to make it feel real, and if you're eight and have been having dreams like that? I don't think you'd even need to have their background o have a total shit-fit over it.

The last line is chilling.

Thank you!

Titles (were you just waiting? I was on vacation):

I figured you were on vacation or something. And? I like "Wreckage," I think I'm gonna use that one, thank you!

[info]batgurl10

April 18 2006, 22:29:18 UTC 6 years ago

I really hate having to explain stuff to people who "dont" get it the first time around, so shame on me for asking, but I so did not get it. ;-(
Please someone tell me exactly how sammy saved dean with his powers? Thanks. I really liked the prose. Sorry Im dense today....

[info]clex_monkie89

April 18 2006, 22:36:33 UTC 6 years ago

It's okay, I knew it was kinda confusing.

The first time around (With the blood and the clicks) was Sammy dreaming about the crash. The second time around was Sammy recognizing everything from his dream and throwing a tantrum until Dean sat in the backseat with him and out of the danger zone.

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[info]scummys

April 18 2006, 22:29:20 UTC 6 years ago

i enjoyed this a lot. i love stories that make me slightly confused until the end. i was like, at first, 'wait, wtf, he was in an accident?'
& then the last few bits made it click & i had to go back & read it all again.
i adore stories that make me do that. i don't know why, but i do.

wonderful job. very powerful. very accurate; it almost seems like kripke actually wrote this bit himself. (:

[info]clex_monkie89

April 18 2006, 23:16:46 UTC 6 years ago

Thank you, I'm glad you liked it!

[info]formerlydf

April 18 2006, 23:37:25 UTC 6 years ago

Oh, wow. Ohwowohwowohow. *blinks. reads it again*

Yeah, that was... strong. And really, really good. I didn't realise until I had finished that the first bit had been a dream, but I guess that was the point, wasn't it? *slaps head*

This was incredible, short but really powerful. (And I love reading wee!Sammy fics, and fics about Sam's powers, so this was basically the perfect combination. *grins*) And it made me happy that there was a Circle K. (Bill and Ted's Excellent Adventure. Hee.)

Would you mind if I put this in my memories?

~DF

[info]clex_monkie89

April 19 2006, 00:15:07 UTC 6 years ago

Yeah, that was... strong. And really, really good. I didn't realise until I had finished that the first bit had been a dream, but I guess that was the point, wasn't it? *slaps head*

Thank you,, I'm glad you liked it!

And it made me happy that there was a Circle K. (Bill and Ted's Excellent Adventure. Hee.)

Had to do that, I live in Phoenix so we have Circle K's everywhere. And? Phoenix subbed for San Dimas. Our Metro Center Mall is San Dimas Mall and out Golfland Sunsplash was Waterloo.

Would you mind if I put this in my memories?

I would be so completely honored!

[info]let_fate_decide

April 19 2006, 01:24:39 UTC 6 years ago

Ah, amazing.

Dad crying.

Click, flash.

Sitting in the ambulance, staring at his big brother's broken body.

Click, flash.

The tube down Dean's throat and the feel of the doctor's voice.

Click, flash.

Especially that. Probably my favorite part, because it's just so.. whoa. One of those 'have to read again because the words affect you so much that you have to make sure you get them right' parts. Lovely.

[info]clex_monkie89

April 19 2006, 01:41:24 UTC 6 years ago

Ah, amazing.

Thank you!

Especially that. Probably my favorite part, because it's just so.. whoa. One of those 'have to read again because the words affect you so much that you have to make sure you get them right' parts. Lovely.

Thank you so much!

[info]cosmic

April 19 2006, 07:33:24 UTC 6 years ago

This is so, so, so, so good.

[info]clex_monkie89

April 19 2006, 15:21:30 UTC 6 years ago

Thank you!

Anonymous

April 19 2006, 20:14:58 UTC 6 years ago

Good story.At first I didn't get that Little! Sammy had a vision,but now I understand.I love this one.

[info]clex_monkie89

April 19 2006, 20:22:15 UTC 6 years ago

Thank you!

[info]curtain__call

April 22 2006, 04:25:18 UTC 6 years ago

I love love LOVE this. As soon as I read the line "Dean sleeping in the front seat with his legs up and against the window" I was like "OMG NOT GOOD, DEAN'S GOING TO GET HUUURT" because it's never a good thing to sit like that in car. ;-)

But I love how little Sam realizes what might happen and figures out a way to stop it.

The last line is just GUH and hits you hard, you know?

But wow. I loved it from start to finish. :-)

[info]clex_monkie89

April 22 2006, 05:43:26 UTC 6 years ago

I love love LOVE this. As soon as I read the line "Dean sleeping in the front seat with his legs up and against the window" I was like "OMG NOT GOOD, DEAN'S GOING TO GET HUUURT" because it's never a good thing to sit like that in car. ;-)

Thank you! It seemed to me like a way Dean would learn how to sleep in the car, head under the dash to keep the sun out of his eyes in the middle of the day.

The last line is just GUH and hits you hard, you know?

Thank you, I wanted something that would stick with you after it was done.

But wow. I loved it from start to finish. :-)

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[info]desertport

April 23 2006, 00:26:09 UTC 6 years ago

This was amazingly cool. I reread it to get my brain around what happened, to see it as it really happened, and, yeah. Amazingl cool. Way to go psychic Sammy!

[info]clex_monkie89

April 23 2006, 03:07:24 UTC 6 years ago

I'm glad you liked this! Thank you very much for commenting!

[info]jetpants

April 29 2006, 22:59:19 UTC 6 years ago

Finally remembered to come back and read this (yeah, don't ask, I don't know why I didn't before either *rolls eyes*) and OH MY GOD. This is so good. I love the way the end mirrors the beginning, it's perfect. And not confusing, it's like Nightmare, where you don't necessarily realise at first that stuff hasn't happened yet, that it's the visions and I love that. So powerful, the realisation at the end with "this time Dean survived." Seriously. BRILLIANT. I love love love the "click, flash" parts and the repitition and Sammy having his crazy powers as a kid and being so freaked out by it.

You need to write so much more SPN fic because you're so good at it. GAH.

[info]clex_monkie89

April 30 2006, 00:07:59 UTC 6 years ago

*Blushes* Thank you sweetie! I'm glad you liked this! I was kind of afraid that it might be too confusing and I'm so glad you liked the ending because I always try to leave it on a strong note.

And? I've got like four hand-written pages of... something that's gonna get chopped and restructed and I have a War Wounds fic for them I'm trying to outline in my head right now.

[info]dodger_winslow

April 30 2006, 00:33:13 UTC 6 years ago

You don't need time. It wasn't confusing. It doesn't get any better than this.

[info]clex_monkie89

April 30 2006, 00:41:04 UTC 6 years ago

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed this!

[info]astiraa

May 28 2006, 21:08:09 UTC 6 years ago

*jawdrop*

This was absolutely incredible. I'm pretty much speechless right now, such a powerful story. I'm so envious of your writing style and how you can say so much in such a compact form, every time I try to write a one shot or a drabble it morphs into something huge and long winded. You seem to have mastered the technique though, this was brilliant, just brilliant.

Dean's still pouting and Dad's still angry when they get going once more. Sammy crawls almost completely into Dean's lap behind Dad's seat and Dean grumbles and tells him to watch out for the leg.

Dad turns the tape back on and this time it's only Sammy's books that get crushed and ruined.

Wow. I hereby declare myself a fan.

[info]clex_monkie89

May 28 2006, 22:04:56 UTC 6 years ago

Wow. I have an actual fan. That is really too incredibly awesome for words.

I'm very glad you enjoyed this story; I'm oddly rpoud of it because it came out really a lot like how I wanted it to.

I actually get intimidated by fics in this fandom a lot because there are some amazing fics in this fandom and many of them are lengthy and beautiful and I'm more of a... tease really. A glimpse here and a small glance there, just enough to make you want more.

[info]astiraa

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[info]rositamia

June 3 2006, 20:57:42 UTC 5 years ago

I really like this. I love how Sam's powers are showing up even back then.

[info]clex_monkie89

June 4 2006, 04:53:14 UTC 5 years ago

Thank you, I'm very glad you enjoyed this!

[info]iatethebunny

June 6 2006, 00:06:20 UTC 5 years ago

Fucking Love

HELL-oh
I LOVE THIS I FUCKing LOVE THIS IT JUST AHAHAH I LOVE IT GOD JUST WHEN I WAS STARTING TO THINK ALL that WAS LEFT to read IN THIS FANDOM WAS SMUTTY And 2DAY I keep STUMBLING OVER FICs LIKE THIS AND THIS IS Amazingly WONDERFUL I LOVE SAMMY VOICE I LOVE THE IMAGERY IT is Startlingly INtense AND YOUR A WONDERFUL PERSON 4 WRITING THIS.
May I please add this to my rec page???

Peace

[info]clex_monkie89

June 6 2006, 00:14:54 UTC 5 years ago

Re: Fucking Love

Thank you very much and I'm glad you enjoyed this. Feel free to put it on your rec page; I'd be honored.

[info]quickbeam_cw

August 15 2006, 16:53:27 UTC 5 years ago

Oh man, this was such an AWESOME story! I just love !psychic!Sam. :D Such a fantastic idea, and very well written. Keep up the good work. :D

[info]clex_monkie89

August 15 2006, 17:18:26 UTC 5 years ago

Thank you very much, I'm glad you enjoyed this!

[info]tenebrio

September 19 2006, 21:27:24 UTC 5 years ago

I was just going through my fic memories, and I had forgotten how very much I love this story (and I have no idea why I didn't say so before). The framing is excellent, and the Dean and Sam interaction is perfect little brother/big brother. ::goes to look for more of your fic::

[info]clex_monkie89

September 19 2006, 21:39:47 UTC 5 years ago

Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed this! And I have all my fic on a sticky-post on the top of my LJ for ease.

[info]amanofmydreams

December 12 2006, 23:52:33 UTC 5 years ago

great story line, I love that Sammy has always had the dreams and that he didn't know what to do about them. But the fact that he still saved Dean was great. I wonder if they ever talked about it????

[info]clex_monkie89

December 13 2006, 00:28:39 UTC 5 years ago

Nope, they never talked about it. Sam made himself forget them because he was afraid.

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[info]elektrik_storm

June 6 2007, 10:33:23 UTC 4 years ago

sos so so good! thank god for precogs! :P

[info]clex_monkie89

June 6 2007, 10:36:53 UTC 4 years ago

Thank you!

And thank God for precogs is right, without Sam Dean would be all broken.

[info]nativestar

October 25 2007, 17:39:40 UTC 4 years ago

Came here via a [info]spnstoryfinders rec and I'm so glad I did because this is amazing. Such a short fic but you've managed to say so much and include so much emotion in it. Lovely.

[info]clex_monkie89

October 26 2007, 20:20:23 UTC 4 years ago

Thank you so much, that means an extra lot because this was the first actual SPN fic I had ever written. It has a special place in my heart. :D

[info]freakonaleash0x

October 25 2007, 22:07:18 UTC 4 years ago

I also found this recced in storyfinders and I had to tell you how much I loved it. I love how it's short, but manages to pack such a big punch, perhaps better than if it were longer and more drawn out. I just. I love it. Excellent job! *hugs* :-D

[info]clex_monkie89

October 26 2007, 20:19:14 UTC 4 years ago

Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked this and thank you for the wonderful comment!
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