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Entry tags:fic, fic genre: incest, fic genre: slash, fic pairing: linc/michael, fic rating: pg-13, fic: prison break, fic: prison break: rules!verse

[Fic] Prison Break: The Difference Between a Rule And a Law
Title: The Difference Between a Rule And a Law
Status: Complete
Rating: PG-13
Fandom(s): Prison Break
Characters: Michael and Lincoln
Pairing: M/L.
Disclaimer: Not mine, own no one.
Prompt: 88 - Control
Summary: They have an "agreement."


They have an "agreement." Technically they have several and technically they're more like rules. The rules cover everything from sleeping to eating, to drugs and money and everything in between.

Rule number one. Linc can smoke pot but he can't go somewhere else to do it or lock himself in the bathroom or anything like that.

Michael's read up on drugs and has struck a deal with Linc.

Rule number seven is no heroin ever. Because it eats holes in your brain and can actually kill you to quit. No Meth either because it damages like heroin and fucks up your outside too. Pot is allowed but cigarettes aren't (Because pot has enough tar in it to begin with).

Linc won't touch alcohol and that's all on his own but Michael sneaks some now and then (Vodka mostly and never beer). He mostly does it just to bring Linc back to Earth and piss him off.

Rule number thirteen is no X or speed or Vicoden or pretty much any other pill (They're too addictive and they're expensive to boot).

Rule twenty-two is cocaine is allowed but only the kind you smoke (Because Michael's read up and snorting it can cave your nose in) and even then only if it's done around Michael.

Rule twenty-nine is no smoke of any type is to be blown in Michael's face and anyone who does it gets bodily removed from the room by Lincoln.

Rule thirty-two is that the bathroom is only to be used for showers and waste expelling, no baths are allowed (And that's one of Michael's personal rules for himself) because too much can happen in that time.

Rule thirty-six is that nobody shoots up in the motel room and nobody leaves pipes of any kind laying around.

Rule forty-one is food must be consumed at least once every two days and sleep is forced at least once a week.

Life Checks (Where Michael calls Linc's pager and Linc calls back within fifteen minutes) are made at random intervals and if one is missed Michael calls the jail hotline. If Linc's name isn't there then Michael is to get on the El and go to Cook County Hospital and give a fake name (Jason Drake, 4-17-78) and a list of fake symptoms (Shooting stomach pains, nausea, vomiting, shortness of breath, headache, and dizziness). Michael and Lincoln have protocols they must follow.

Rule number forty-five is that anyone who wakes up Michael while he's asleep gets the crap knocked out of them by Linc. It's only happened twice and once he broke he guy's arm.

Rule fifty-two is Michael must, must, must be taken to the library at least once a week. He will be taken there when it opens at nine and he will leave only when it is closed at nine. If Michael misses his library day Linc is then confined to the room for a full twenty-four hours and is only allowed to leave it with Michael permission.

Michael hates that Lincoln does drugs but he makes Linc do them around him because he's afraid that one day Linc's going to OD somewhere else and Michael won't know. Michael can do a tracheotomy (in theory) and he has a homemade thing of Ipecac and charcoal just in case.

Rule sixty-three is that no one touches Michael's things. That rule has been broken a number of times and Michael's had his books and his notebooks and his drawings stolen so many times that he just doesn't draw anymore. It makes Linc feel like crap because he blames himself for his brother's misery. Michael just blames the people who took his stuff.

Rule sixty-nine exists just because.

Rule three hundred and seventeen is the only rule the brother's didn't make. Everyone around them has it and it's an unspoken rule that most of Lincoln's associates know. Do not ask. You do not ask what their last name is and you do not ask why they are where they are and above all you do not ask about Them. It's an open secret that there's something about the brothers that just isn't... "Normal." Everybody who associates with them has heard the story about that one guy Ocean and what Linc did to him. It was really just a poor choice of words on Ocean's part ("Your fuckin' brother gots you on a shorter leash than my woman dog, you need to cut that fucker loose. Ain't no shit like that worth it if you ain't gettin' somethin' back, know what 'm sayin'?") but it landed Lincoln in county for eight months and Michael was seen all around Humboldt Park and even occasionally up in The Loop with some nice new clothes on. That brings us to the next rule.

Rule seventy-two is Don't Tell. Michael and Linc give out no personal details beyond surface ones to anyone and they don't mention anything that happens or happened away from each other. Linc doesn't tell Michael what Ocean said to provoke him and Michael doesn't tell Linc how he keeps himself alive and out of The System every time Linc gets picked up. Linc always wants to ask but doesn't, because he's afraid of the answer and what it will mean for them.

Rule eighty-eight is Michael holds on to the money. If Linc holds on to it they both know they won't have it for long. So Michael holds on to all the money.

Rule ninety-one is the rent gets paid first. It does not matter if they have seventy dollars or seven hundred, it does not matter how long it's been since they ate or how badly they need warmer clothes, rent gets paid first.

Rule number ninety-three is rent is never paid more then two days ahead though because they never know when they'll have to pick up and leave. They once lost six hundred dollars in prepaid days at a Motel 6 because of a tip they got about the cops.

Rule ninety-nine is Michael eats first. Michael has his very own rule on hundred which says that no matter how hungry he is he never eats more then half of his food because Linc will only eat after Michael's full and even then only whatever Michael doesn't eat. So Michael always orders an obscene amount of food and never eats it all because it's the only way he can get Linc to eat.

Rule one hundred and two is one of Michael's personal rules. He always makes Lincoln go to sleep first because that way he can check him while he's asleep. Michael is very methodical in his search for track-marks and he does it the same way every time: eyes first, ears, jaw and neck next, armpits and elbows after that, hips and pelvis next followed by the backs of the knees. Finally he checks the webbing between the fingers and the webbing between the toes. He's never found any marks yet and he hopes he never will.

Rule one hundred and seven is no watches in bed. Every once in a while Linc will forget to take off his watch and Michael will wake up with a new bald-spot and a headache. Rule one hundred and seven bee is Michael must remove all pens and pencil from the bed before sleep. This was added on after Linc jumped on the bed one night and got a freshly sharpened pencil stuck in his stomach.

Rules one hundred and twenty-one through one hundred and forty-four are codes of conduct for Michael. They state how he is to act, what he can and cannot say and do, and exactly what names he is not allowed to call Lisa, Veronica, Stacy, Blonde Kim, Fat Kim, Detroit, Annabella, Shaniqua, Katarina, LaToya, Latricia, Nicole or Mary-Sue.

Michael has broken every rule from one hundred and twenty-one to one hundred and forty-four.

Rule one hundred and fifty is no biting.

Rule one hundred and fifty-one is no marks.

Rule one hundred and fifty-two is Michael must stop that right now.

Rule one hundred and fifty-three is Lincoln may not sleep within arms reach of a telephone. Michael has a small one-inch scar on the back of his head from Lincoln slamming the phone into his head at three in the morning after a bad call.

Rule one hundred and fifty-four is Lincoln has to kiss it and make it better. Rule one hundred and fifty-four bee is tail bone's don't count.

Rule one hundred and sixty-one is Michael is not allowed to use Lincoln to "scare the preps."

Rule one hundred and sixty-nine designates when and where Michael may "lay his claim." Claims are Michael's way of feeling safe when the world gets to be too much for him. Michael isn't allowed to claim in front of other people because it can get the both of them in trouble and brings too much attention to them.

They don't own very much clothing between them so everything is shared. Michael refuses to wear new clothing, he'll only wear something if Lincoln's worn it first and he has an obsession with the way Linc smells. Michael wears the same cheap, spray-on deodorant and uses the same soap and shampoo as him, but it's Linc's sweat that does it. Michael knows it's disgusting to like someone's sweat and he knows that it's not the smell of it. He doesn't think it smells particularly good but he's read up enough to know that it's the memories the smell of his sweat evokes that he likes so much.

Michael's claims tend to vary depending on how overwhelmed he is feeling. They can be anything from needing simply to hold his brother's hand (finger's interlaced, two squeezes) needing as much full-body contact as he can get. Michael doesn't usually get that far along except for some nights when Lincoln's been gone all day. Those are the nights he curls a little closer and squeezes a little harder and usually ends up crying on his big brother's chest while Lincoln holds him and whispers.

Rule one hundred and seventy-three states that Michael is never to touch a single drug ever including any sort of medicine or vitamin given to him by anyone, no matter how nice they seem or how much of a good idea he thinks it is. This rule came about after they entered The System and is the result of an incredibly stupid, insanely ridiculous Plan Michael came up with. Lincoln will never forget how his baby brother looked with a tube down his throat and needles stuck into the back of his hands.

Rule two hundred states that neither Michael nor Lincoln is ever to handle a gun. Period. End of sentence. Michael made Lincoln swear to this a little more then four hours after he was let out of The Room. The Room was room number 236 at The Rose Inn, a run-down motel in Humboldt Park, and it was the place Michael was locked in with an angry Aryan named Zeth and a strung-out Latino of unknown origin named Giovanni. Michael was sitting on the bed thinking that he knew better to open the door and that Linc was going to be mad when he found out Michael broke Rule Fourteen when it happened. There was a small click and a loud pop and suddenly Michael's face was wet and Giovanni wasn't complaining about his next fix any more.

Rule two hundred and one states that Michael will never break another rule again.

Rule two hundred and two states that Lincoln will never deal with the Aryan Brotherhood again.

Rule two hundred and three states that Lincoln will never, ever, ever tease Michael about wetting the bed and that he will never complain about waking up covered in urine.

Once, at All My Children Michael wet the bed. Another girl there, Tasha, made fun of him and called him a little baby. Before Michael could stop him Lincoln had his hand around her throat and her head against the wall. Tasha got a Type-Three and got all her TV time taken away for the night, Lincoln got a Type-Two and had all privileges taken away for two weeks, and was banned from being in the same room with Tasha without Staff.

Rule two hundred and twenty-seven states that the brother's will not lie to each other without good cause. Rules two hundred and twenty-seven bee through rules two hundred and twenty-seven zee ef details exactly what good cause is and how long one is allowed to lie to another and rules two hundred and twenty-seven kay and two hundred and twenty-seven el state that no matter what neither one of them will ever swear to a lie to the other one and that no matter what if they tell the truth everything shall be forgiven. Much like confession without all the work.

Michael went to confession once, when he was around sixteen or so. Michael refused to repent for a so-called "sin" and decided he didn't think he was going to hell after all. Ever since then Michael's had his own relationship with God and it makes him feel a lot better about his life than sitting in a church being told he was going to hell ever did. He still ticks the box for Christianity and he still has his rosary and he even goes to church every once in a while. He considers himself Catholic but whenever someone asks what church he goes to he almost always gives the same answer. Saint Sibylline of Pavia.

Veronica was one of the only people to ever ask who she was. Michael's exact words were as follows: "She lived in a small cell for most of her life and is the patron saint of loss of parents and bastard children. She fits." Veronica had long since stopped trying to talk sense into Michael and just nodded her head and walked away.

Rule number two hundred and sixty-four says that closed doors stay closed and what ever has passed is past.

Rule number two hundred and seventy-one is Never abandon your brother. No matter what.

Rule number two hundred and ninety-nine is blood is thicker then water.

Rule three hundred states that there is only one law that matters.

Law number one says you do not abandon your brother.

Ever.



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[info]mooyoo
2006-01-23 08:29 am UTC (link)
Oh my god, I'm so glad I waited up for this... totally speechless, I just fucking loved this. Like, insanely loved it. A lot. Everything, loved the rules, can so see especially Michael coming up with something like this, love love love the way you write (again, I love the "referring to things without explicity stating them" thing - completely puts you into their world and their heads).

There are so many things I'd quote, but I'll stick to the parts that stood out the most:
Rule fifty-two is Michael must, must, must be taken to the library at least once a week.

This made me smile, especially Linc being punished if they miss a week - like Michael grounding Linc or something :)

Rule sixty-nine exists just because.

This made me laugh, 'cause I'm 12.

Michael has broken every rule from one hundred and twenty-one to one hundred and forty-four.

Loved that. For no real reason, but I loved it.

Rule seventy-two is Don't Tell.

That and the one before it bring up all kinds of creepy ideas for just how Michael did survive on his own, made even more so because it's left open-ended.

And the ending is... so good.

Gah, I just loved it.

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-01-23 09:18 am UTC (link)
I am so happy you loved this. Really you have no clue. I've spent the last day and a half on this fic and I wasn't sure it was ever going to get out of my brain the right way.

This made me smile, especially Linc being punished if they miss a week - like Michael grounding Linc or something :)

You know Michael loves his reading. And? He'd totally ground Linc in a heartbeat too.

This made me laugh, 'cause I'm 12.

Heh, I liked that part, they're a couple of teenaged boys so obviously they'd do something stupid like that.

Loved that. For no real reason, but I loved it.

Michael was a bratty little kid sometimes, you know that. And? He had a special dislike for anyone dating Linc and distracting his Big Borther.

That and the one before it bring up all kinds of creepy ideas for just how Michael did survive on his own, made even more so because it's left open-ended.

I have some ides in my head but I wanted to leave it open for suggestion. Because? What I think may be bad/scary/whatever may be nothing compaired to what the reader thinks. I tend to think of a Neil Gaiman quote when it comes to they way I write, he once said something like "To kill a man off-panel is to condemn him to a thousand deaths." It's all about the white lines in bewtween the panels.

And the ending is... so good.

Thank you! I almost gave it something different way up near rule 203 but it felt... I couldn't get it down right and decided that it just didn't fit. It wasn' meant to be there.

Gah, I just loved it.

Thank you! You, by the way? Are an evil bitch who makes me cry. And yet? I still feel the love.

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[info]lissa_bear
2006-01-23 01:15 pm UTC (link)
Wow! I am totally floored! I love this! Perfect beginning and perfect ending! Hell, all of the stuff in the middle is perfect too! This is amazing!

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-01-23 08:08 pm UTC (link)
I am so glad you like this! Thank you!

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[info]alazysod
2006-01-23 03:22 pm UTC (link)
Oh, I fucking love this. I don't really know how to put it into words –– it's just awesome like a hundred billion hotdogs. It's disturbing in some ways, but then it's beautiful (like the last line).

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-01-23 08:11 pm UTC (link)
[...] awesome like a hundred billion hotdogs.

I love that! I'm so gonna start saying that now.

It's disturbing in some ways, but then it's beautiful (like the last line).

Thank you, it's hard to hit that right balance without making it feel awkward or forced.

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[info]zsuness
2006-01-23 04:18 pm UTC (link)
omg I have SO MUCH love for this!!!!!I can't even quote cause seriously the whole thing is so well written and perfect and well-built.. WOW.

The whole fic/concept/usage of words.. brought me in a mood I was in when I was watching this movie called Burnt Money.. (Plata Quemada) Lincoln and Michael are much like those characters in that film.. (Nene and Angel if my memory serves me well) So it makes it even more special to me because I loved that film.

Really, I ADORED the whole thing.

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-01-23 08:17 pm UTC (link)
Thank you so much, I'm so glad you liked this!

I seem to have a thing about weird writing styles, I really like how I did this one and it's given me plans.

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[info]thelana
2006-01-23 05:44 pm UTC (link)
Love love love! As usual, there is just so much *stuff* in this. I have special love for the little side things like:

He mostly does it just to bring Linc back to Earth and piss him off.

Somehow that makes me smile. It's like you could take any of these lines and write a mini drabble story around them.

If Michael misses his library day Linc is then confined to the room for a full twenty-four hours and is only allowed to leave it with Michael permission.

;p Kinky!

Michael's had his books and his notebooks and his drawings stolen so many times that he just doesn't draw anymore. It makes Linc feel like crap because he blames himself for his brother's misery. Michael just blames the people who took his stuff.

There is just so much awwww :((( in this.

Your fuckin' brother gots you on a shorter leash then my woman dog,

I know he is slanging, but isn't it "than" rather than "then"? LOL "My woman dog"?

Michael doesn't tell Linc how he keeps himself alive and out of The System every time Linc gets picked up. Linc always wants to ask but doesn't, because he's afraid of the answer and what it will mean for them.


I'm with whoever said it. This is the scaries/saddest part. And it should totally be a story by itself.

They state how he is to act, what he can and cannot say and do, and exactly what names he is not allowed to call Lisa, Veronica, Stacy, Blonde Kim, Fat Kim, Detroit, Annabella, Shaniqua, Katarina, LaToya, Latricia, Nicole or Mary-Sue.

(1) not to call in what circumstances?
(2) Detroit? Latricia? (poor girl) Mary-Sue? LOL! Lincoln got himself some funky girlfriends.

Rule one hundred and fifty-one is no marks.

*shuddering*

Rule one hundred and fifty-two is Michael must stop that right now.

Rule one hundred and fifty-four is Lincoln has to kiss it and make it better. Rule one hundred and fifty-four bee is tail bone's don't count.

This rule came about after they entered The System and is the result of an incredibly stupid, insanely ridiculous Plan Michael came up with. Lincoln will never forget how his baby brother looked with a tube down his throat and needles stuck into the back of his hands.

Michael isn't allowed to claim in front of other people because it can get the both of them in trouble and brings too much attention to them.


Another bunch I really would want to see the backstory of :D

And the last one? I really wanna know how they handled that when the mother was still around and what she thought of it.

Rule one hundred and sixty-one is Michael is not allowed to use Lincoln to "scare the preps."


This one made me laugh and gave me tons of hilarious mental images.

Michael refuses to wear new clothing, he'll only wear something if Lincoln's worn it first and he has an obsession with the way Linc smells.

I wonder when he abandoned that and shifted towards Armani. Probably in college when he was forced to wear classier clothing.

Those are the nights he curls a little closer and squeezes a little harder and usually ends up crying on his big brother's chest while Lincoln holds him and whispers.

Awwwww *hugs*

Michael was sitting on the bed thinking that he knew better to open the door and that Linc was going to be mad when he found out Michael broke Rule Fourteen when it happened.

Scary! And yes, you are mean for not giving us all the facts.

Rule two hundred and one states that Michael will never break another rule again.

LOL, yeah, right! :D

Love their attitude towards lying. Love your take on Michael and religion.

Really wonder how those childhood rules would have erroded over time, with age, if at all. And which ones erroded or got forgotten and which ones didn't. Wonder if years later Michael ever looked back upon those rules and shook his head at how crazy they were back then. Or if it freaked him out how many still apply.

Veronica had long since stopped trying to talk sense into Michael and jut nodded her head and walked away.

Think "just" is missing an "s".

Law number one says you do not abandon your brother.

Ever.


Perfect ending.

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-01-23 09:01 pm UTC (link)
Somehow that makes me smile. It's like you could take any of these lines and write a mini drabble story around them.

I think it?s because when I tell a story I never seem to actually tell a story, just a brief summary of several other stories in a kinda catchy way.

;p Kinky!

You know it!

There is just so much awwww :((( in this.

I had to do it; Michael doesn?t seem much like the type who really got attached to material things much so someone stealing his clothes or action figures woul probably just be annoying but things he drew or things he wrote? That has personal value and it?s a low-blow by whoever took it because that type of stuff has no monetary gain and was taken just for the sake of inflicting pain.

I know he is slanging, but isn't it "than" rather than "then"? LOL "My woman dog"?

Bah! Thank you; I always get confused on ?than? and ?then,? it?s totally unfair. And the ?My woman dog? thing is a trueism, I know some guy from somewhere (Don?t ask me the details cause I can?t remember) who was not allowed to call his girlfriend his bitch because it pissed her off. SO he called her ?My woman dog.? And she let him get away with it because it was funny and stupid.

I'm with whoever said it. This is the scaries/saddest part. And it should totally be a story by itself.

Dude. It?s going on my WIP List right now. And yet? I have ideas on how to do it without actually telling anyone anything concrete. So much fun.

(1) not to call in what circumstances?
(2) Detroit? Latricia? (poor girl) Mary-Sue? LOL! Lincoln got himself some funky girlfriends.


(1) Any circumstances. You know Michael was the kid who would come up with the most back-handed ways of insulting someone. That and I can totally see him deciding that he?s only going to refer to one of The Girls as ?Skanky? or something like that. And I very much see him making little snide remarks about them getting back out on the corner or they might be late for work.
(2) Oh yes, more people I know. The worst one by far? Was named Chlamydia Brown at birth by her mother. Her mother was obviously a huge fucking idiot.

*shuddering*

Cause it can just mean so many things and be taken in so many different ways, can?t it?

Another bunch I really would want to see the backstory of :D

Rule 173 is on my list, the others? are still puttering around trying to flesh out.

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-01-23 09:02 pm UTC (link)
And the last one? I really wanna know how they handled that when the mother was still around and what she thought of it.

Oh man, I have these horrible images of Mama Scofield just freaking out after seeing a Claim and then doing the thing later where she takes Michael aside and asks him if his big brother broke any of the Stranger Rules or did anything that made him feel weird. Wow. My stomach hurts just thinking about that.

This one made me laugh and gave me tons of hilarious mental images.

You know what popped into my mind here? Michael standing outside of a mall with some people he knows from somewhere (And of course they?re ragging on him and making him feel like crap) and then Linc coming to pick him up. And you have to understand that the Linc I see? Is about six foot flat now and a little on the heavyish side but with lots of muscle. And he has the kinda longish Kurt Cobain-length grunge hair and some form of facial hair that was incredibly cool at the time (Like a Van Dyke or something like that) and generally made him look like a bad-ass. And? He?s fresh from a fight because his knuckles are torn and there?s this weird reddish-brown rusty looking stuff on his boots. And then? Of course seeing the other kid?s reactions Michael decides he wants to parade Linc around to everyone all the time now. Huh. All that from one sentence.

I wonder when he abandoned that and shifted towards Armani. Probably in college when he was forced to wear classier clothing.

I?m thinking the first time they got put in The System was probably the first time Michael wore anything new (Because hand-me-down?s save money) and I think after that he started moving on a little. But? In that big ol? nice apartment of his? I see like three shirts a pair of pants and his lone Warm Jacket all stolen from Linc.

Scary! And yes, you are mean for not giving us all the facts.

See? This is the fun type of gore, the type that makes the mind work and come up with all these horrible images to fill in the blanks.

LOL, yeah, right! :D

T?cha, I know huh? It?s like, the PUGNAc alone break a big rule and everything after that are fork-stabs.

Love their attitude towards lying.

I figure they both no they?re gonna lie, they may as well make it easy to confess. Cause the thing that keeps the lie going? Is how the other person will react when they find out they?ve been lied too.

Love your take on Michael and religion.

Michael?s his own sort of guy in every other way so it seems to me that following someone else?s rules about religion would just not gel with him. I mean, especially with things like what makes him a bad person and what makes him a good one, that would just not float right.

Think "just" is missing an "s".

Mm. Bugger. Thank you, off to fix that in a moment.

Perfect ending.

Thank you, it just felt... right. Like it fit there.

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[info]thelana
2006-01-24 12:25 am UTC (link)
Oh man, I have these horrible images of Mama Scofield just freaking out after seeing a Claim and then doing the thing later where she takes Michael aside and asks him if his big brother broke any of the Stranger Rules or did anything that made him feel weird. Wow. My stomach hurts just thinking about that.


I insist you write that, dammit! (though it is kinda close to the scenario with LJ in your LJ fic)

Grin, I when I first went to high school one of my older cousins was in his final grade. He was one of those punk kids, head shaved except a purple mohawk, tattered clothes, dozens of piercings and a huge ass chain between his army boots. And everytime I walked by I was all "Eeeeeee, check it out, that's my cousin *pride*".

T?cha, I know huh? It?s like, the PUGNAc alone break a big rule and everything after that are fork-stabs.

And there's Linc touching the gun in the flashback. And Linc telling Sara he abandoned Michael. So, have you finally watched those episodes?

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[info]almostforgiven
2006-01-23 11:21 pm UTC (link)
I really am not entirely sure how to put how much I loved this.

This is. Absolutely. Effing. Fabulous.

I would have added more adjectives to that little bit but that would have been superfluous and annoying.

Gah! So much to quote! So little room!

Rule one hundred and fifty-two is Michael must stop that right now.

Bwahaha.

Rule two hundred and one states that Michael will never break another rule again.

Rule two hundred and two states that Lincoln will never deal with the Aryan Brotherhood again.


Aryan Brotherhood! And Lincoln! I want to know about that! (I'm such a freak lol)

Veronica was one of the only people to ever ask who she was. Michael's exact words were as follows: "She lived in a small cell for most of her life and is the patron saint of loss of parents and bastard children. She fits." Veronica had long since stopped trying to talk sense into Michael and just nodded her head and walked away.

That's awesome.

Wow. You're awesome. *Rereads a few times*

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-01-23 11:31 pm UTC (link)
*Glees so very hard*

I really am not entirely sure how to put how much I loved this.

This is. Absolutely. Effing. Fabulous.


Thank you so much! I'm incredibly happy that you liked this.

Bwahaha.

Rule 152 was obviously broken repeatedly. :P

Aryan Brotherhood! And Lincoln! I want to know about that! (I'm such a freak lol)

Does that make the fact that I want to write it make me a bigger freak?

Wow. You're awesome. *Rereads a few times*

Wow. I'm awesome? That's so cool! Thank you and I'm glad you like this!

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[info]castalie
2006-01-24 11:11 pm UTC (link)
*is speechless*

Okay they are no words to express how much I loved this but I'll try. It's an incredible piece of writing - it's in turn chilling, amusing, disturbing, sexy, beautiful and I don't know what other adjectives.

It's incredible! There's such an intensity in that fic... it's powerful. I'm completely smitten with it!

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-01-24 11:17 pm UTC (link)
Thank you so much, I'm so happy you liked this.

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[info]smidgy06
2006-01-24 11:32 pm UTC (link)
Hot damn!

I loved the feel of this fic. The flow of it. The rules. The strange creepy yet weird love and incesty relationship between Lincoln and Michael. The intensity between them. Guh.

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-01-24 11:37 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! I was worried about this one at first because it... it kept wandering into the sterile zone where it was just the rules and no stories. Had to keep pulling it back.

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[info]thelana
2006-01-25 07:50 am UTC (link)
You got recced

:)

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-01-25 08:07 am UTC (link)
Oh wow. That's just... Wow.

That's the first time I've ever been recced before. I mean not counting your Pimping tht's my first rec.

Wow. I am so giddily happy right now you have like no clue.

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[info]rhymeswithghoti
2006-01-25 06:39 pm UTC (link)
Love. Lovelovelove.

I've been putting off reading this for a while because I wanted to have the time to sit down and really enjoy it, and it was so worth the wait. I love fics that can have some creepiness and darkness, but also little flickers of humor, and you do that so well.

The thing I love about your fics is that they're like crack. Fabulous, engaging, and make me desperate for more because of all your little teasing, maddening hints at other stories/details.

Fabulous writing. The flow was great, the structure and jumpiness of the rules was awesome, because it really accented the chaotic/disjointed kind of life they have, and the character development was wonderdul too. Love.

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-01-25 08:20 pm UTC (link)
I love fics that can have some creepiness and darkness, but also little flickers of humor, and you do that so well.

Oh thank you so much! I'm always afraid that I may go a bit overboard or the wrong line might feel flat suddenly.

The thing I love about your fics is that they're like crack. Fabulous, engaging, and make me desperate for more because of all your little teasing, maddening hints at other stories/details.

I just have so many ideas and this entire life in my head of them that I just need to leave a crumb here and there. And man, it's really fun to drop a small line here about something which becomes a paragraph over there and eventually the full story somehwere along the way.

Fabulous writing. The flow was great, the structure and jumpiness of the rules was awesome, because it really accented the chaotic/disjointed kind of life they have, and the character development was wonderdul too. Love.

Thank you so much, I'm glad it didn't feel too jumpy, because it would have been so easy to go overboard with it.

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[info]veradeath
2006-01-27 02:44 am UTC (link)
This is all kinds of awesome and briliant and wickedly cool and great and fabulous. I loved everything about this. You are fantastic.

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-01-27 02:51 am UTC (link)
Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked this!

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[info]miss_mazzie
2006-01-30 03:48 am UTC (link)
I really enjoyed this. I think my favorite one, actually, is "Rule one hundred and fifty-two is Michael must stop that right now." It just made me laugh.

I can see something like this starting with Michael as a young boy. And maybe they continue it as adults just out of tradition, but if that's the case, I think some of the rules are out of order.

But the ending was really great. You had a lot of interesting ideas for rules. I'm kinda curious, actually, what comes between 91 and 93.

Anyway, thanks for an unusual and, at times, disturbing fic.

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-01-30 04:46 am UTC (link)
I really enjoyed this. I think my favorite one, actually, is "Rule one hundred and fifty-two is Michael must stop that right now." It just made me laugh.

Yeah, it's a good all purpose rule that has been broken many, many times.

I can see something like this starting with Michael as a young boy. And maybe they continue it as adults just out of tradition, but if that's the case, I think some of the rules are out of order.

I think the rules started when Michael was eight or nine, and a lot of the rules were made After the Fact; like rule forty-five. In my mind (And hopefully eventually in a fic) Michael was woken up at least a dozen of times before he complained to Linc and the rule was made.

But the ending was really great. You had a lot of interesting ideas for rules. I'm kinda curious, actually, what comes between 91 and 93.

Thank you! And Rule 92 just might become a fic itself one day, I have an idea or two running through my head for it.

Anyway, thanks for an unusual and, at times, disturbing fic.

Your very welcome and thank you for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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[info]halfshellvenus
2006-02-02 07:29 pm UTC (link)
Rule one hundred and seven is no watches in bed. Every once in a while Linc will forget to take off his watch and Michael will wake up with a new bald-spot and a headache.

Hey, did you steal that from my SN Genfic? :-P

I liked this very, very much. I think it covers tons of your theories about life growing up for the two boys, and I love the skipping around of the rules, what's covered, what's not. And the ending.

My only real complaint is that this is So HARD to read on your LJ Journal. It's so murky that I have to lean way forward, and still-- eyestrain.

Can you lighten the tint of your journal slightly? It's so bad that I was tempted to copy this off into a Word file to read. :-(

Lovely story, though. I will "Mem" it anyway.

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-02-02 11:24 pm UTC (link)
Hey, did you steal that from my SN Genfic? :-P

Dude, I totally did and I didn't even realize it until a few days ago! I was re-reading your fics and I came on the No Watches scene and was like "Son of a bitch! Shit. I knew it sounded to good to be mine."

I liked this very, very much. I think it covers tons of your theories about life growing up for the two boys, and I love the skipping around of the rules, what's covered, what's not. And the ending.

Thank you! I was really afraid that I wouldn't get my thoughts across clearly in this fic.

My only real complaint is that this is So HARD to read on your LJ Journal. It's so murky that I have to lean way forward, and still-- eyestrain.

Can you lighten the tint of your journal slightly? It's so bad that I was tempted to copy this off into a Word file to read. :-(

Okay, so it's not just me. When I view my layout on my laptop it's perfect (I think it's mainly because I can tilt the screen until it looks perfect) but I've noticed that on the comps at the college it's all darkish and... dark. I'll try and figure out how to... do something. Maybe if I can get the font a little brighter it might work...

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[info]jeyhawk
2006-02-03 09:23 pm UTC (link)
I'm in complete awe and I don't even know where to begin. This was absolutley amazing brilliant and I want to have your babies. :0)

I love the rules, the snippets of life, the amendments... Everything.

This paints such wonderful, powerful images in my mind that I'm not sure whether to laugh, cry or just implode. I love it.

Every rule takes us to a new dimension, every answer give another question. It's perfect.

Thank you for sharing this.

Lots of love for you.

/Jey

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-02-03 09:42 pm UTC (link)
I'm in complete awe and I don't even know where to begin. This was absolutley amazing brilliant and I want to have your babies. :0)

Ee! Thank you!

I love the rules, the snippets of life, the amendments... Everything.

All [info]thelana's fault, we were having a talk about drugs somewhere and this totally fell out of it.

This paints such wonderful, powerful images in my mind that I'm not sure whether to laugh, cry or just implode. I love it.

Thank you so much!

Every rule takes us to a new dimension, every answer give another question. It's perfect.

*Blushes* Thank you a lot, I admit that I love teasing with questions and leaving these little open-ended bits that make your brain just twist and turn and freak out trying to figure out the details.

Thank you for sharing this.

Thank you for commenting!

Lots of love for you.

The love is completely reutrned. Really.

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[info]fiddleyoumust
2006-02-07 09:08 pm UTC (link)
Rule one hundred and fifty-two is Michael must stop that right now.

I love this line. :)

Rule one hundred and fifty-four is Lincoln has to kiss it and make it better. Rule one hundred and fifty-four bee is tail bone's don't count

and this one too...

This is really great Clex! I must go read it again.

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-02-07 09:22 pm UTC (link)
I love this line. :)

It's just a great all-purpose rule, huh? It's a very Linc thing to make up in my mind.

and this one too...

Thank you! Michael actually has a pretty cool sense of humor on the show once you learn how to decipher the deapan delivery, I can easily see him trying to make Linc kiss his ass after falling out of bed or something.

This is really great Clex! I must go read it again.

Thank you again, I'm glad you liked it!

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[info]byrons_brain
2006-02-25 08:46 pm UTC (link)
Fantastic! I love this, brilliant idea....

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-02-25 11:25 pm UTC (link)
Thank you babe, glad you liked it!

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[info]ariss_tenoh
2006-04-04 12:47 am UTC (link)
Wow, I'm impressed. This is such an intricate piece of Michael and Lincoln's life. The subtle hints in it make perfect sense to the characters as adults. I think this deserves to be a pilot episode to the series.

Excellent writing^_^

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-04-04 12:55 am UTC (link)
Thank you so much, I'm very glad you enjoyed this!

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[info]uponplains
2006-04-15 12:42 am UTC (link)
Wow I just found this (yes I am late) and DUDE it is amazing. Do you mind if I friend you? I need more PB people on my flist, especially ones who write as brilliantly as you do. Fantastic job, I especially love rule 152. xD

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-04-15 04:07 am UTC (link)
I'm glad you liked it! Go ahead and friend away, I just friended you back. Warning though: I am very anti spoiler. Very.

And? 152 seems to be a Fan Favorite, [info]alazysod even made an icon!

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[info]rubysnowflake
2006-06-01 03:13 am UTC (link)
This is so good. The format is just pulled off so well. I haven't seen many rules fics out there, and this is by far the best I've read.

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-06-01 04:54 am UTC (link)
Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it!

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(Anonymous)
2006-06-13 06:01 pm UTC (link)
gawwwwwwd i loved this so much! I think don't tell definitely needs some kind of michaelprostitute story... and the whole 'never wake michael up' needs something... b/c why would one of linc's friends be in michael's bedroom or just generally near him wherever he's sleeping unless they had bad intentions.... moooooorrre!

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-06-13 08:42 pm UTC (link)
Calendar Days (Leap Year) is a story you're gonna wann read for sure then. Poor Mikey. :(

I'm glad you liked this though!

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(Anonymous)
2006-06-19 12:04 am UTC (link)
ooooh where would i find Calendar Days (Leap Year) then?? xx

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-06-19 12:06 am UTC (link)
Right here!

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[info]thelana
2006-06-19 05:27 pm UTC (link)
Randomly? Was this always an intentional thing?

Rule number two hundred and seventy-one is Never abandon your brother. No matter what.

Law number one says you do not abandon your brother.

Ever.

(for the record, it works, they are kids after all, repetitiveness isn't out of character for them after all)

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-06-19 08:30 pm UTC (link)
Yeah it was. I figured that Lincoln made the rule, Michael made it Law and they both decided to keep them both in for extra emphasis.

(for the record, it works, they are kids after all, repetitiveness isn't out of character for them after all)

I figure they've got a handful of rules that reoccur. "Michael must wear shoes outside" is three different rules because he keeps taking them off and losing them. "Lincoln must not sell his pager" is five because he keeps doing it when they need money.

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[info]alistra
2006-10-31 07:21 pm UTC (link)
I have to admit I didn't understand all of this - which is bugging me but connected to english not being my first language and not the least your writing.

Still, I really really like this. :D Thank you for sharing.

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[info]clex_monkie89
2006-10-31 07:55 pm UTC (link)
Thank you very much, I'm glad you liked this!

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